In Class Work Week 7
#3
We all knew that it would only be a matter of time before we lost you once you lost your husband. You lived another three great years after he passed away. I was too young to remember grandpa but I do remember you. I remember I would love to visit you whenever I got the chance. I would sit on your lap and watch you crochet for hours. I still have the blanket you made me for my sixth birthday. The bright colors have long faded but the sentimental value is priceless. I’ll never forget the day dad and I went to visit you and we couldn’t wake you up. I remember the flashing lights of the ambulance shining through the window as tears flowed down my face. There is never a day that goes by that I don’t think about you.You were such a wonderful grandmother. When I really miss you, all I have to do is get out the blanket you made me and somehow I feel better.
Would this piece lose anything if the first two sentences were dropped? Focus and a quick quick impression are vital for these--some backstory maybe, and you could argue for keeping these two sentences, but generally, less is going to be more more for these.
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