Prompt #6
One thing many people don’t know about me is that I collect cards that I‘m given. I keep them all whether it’s a birthday card, Christmas card, or a thank you card. As my collection grows so does the container I keep them in. First I started out with a shelf, then a clear container, then a drawer, now they reside in a box. Every once in a great while I will flip through the cards and read the funny or heartfelt notes from friends and family; it brings back memories. I have the last card my grandfather ever sent me before he moved and ended all contact with his entire family. I have three of the same card because my grandmother has bought me the same birthday card for the past three years without realizing it. I have a card my best friend made me with quotes from our favorite television show. I even have a card where my aunt used origami to fold money into a small heart. I never unfolded it to see what the bill actually was. The bill is still neatly placed inside it’s card. Every card I receive is special to me because it shows that the people around me care.
Interesting piece--parts work and other parts almost work!
ReplyDeleteHere's what works best IMO: " I have a card my best friend made me with quotes from our favorite television show. I even have a card where my aunt used origami to fold money into a small heart. I never unfolded it to see what the bill actually was. The bill is still neatly placed inside it’s card" That's complete, nothing left to say, no reader questions unanswered.
Here's what almost works: "I have the last card my grandfather ever sent me before he moved and ended all contact with his entire family. I have three of the same card because my grandmother has bought me the same birthday card for the past three years without realizing it. I have a card my best friend made me with quotes from our favorite television show."
Each of these three items could and should have been pushed a step further: what did your grandfather say? What is on this fascinating card your grandmother is obsessed with? What are some of the quotations, what is the tv show?